Greetings fair maidens, covetous dragons and charred knight’s bones, happy Friday!
Consider this a drive-by poem as my schedule is somewhat limited but I wanted still to take a brief moment with y’all. So let’s do it!
“Crustacean Nation Recalibration”, June 15, 2020.
An octopus lives inside
My dense, unruly brains
Eights arms as well all reside
Amid overt ink stains
The issue’s that they won’t work
With coordination
In addition tend to shirk
Every relegation
Singular these branch’s thoughts
Plus contradictory
Fighting to connect their dots
For lone limb’s victory
Could I one day learn to teach
These stems or best their mind
Siphon back essence they leach
And return such in kind.
I actually wrote an entirely different poem along the same lines years ago, hated and buried it. The concept was decent though so I’m glad the original was unearthed, stripped down and reformatted as nearly tolerable:)
Amusingly the title also works to the “School House Rock, Conjunction Junction” tune. A happy if completely irrelevant coincidence.
Have a superlative weekend! Should I fail to find further time for inanities over the said period I’ll assuredly be back with the regular trademarked insouciance before long.
Mahalo!
-Alex Blaikie
Categories: original poetry writing
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A fractured mind held together by cellophane and some used tack.
I enjoyed this poem, especially the rhymes.
Suggestion– I would change “brains” to brain. Make it grammatically correct.
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Haha I did consider it however I didn’t want to kill the plural on stains or handicap the rhyme. Thank you very much. And given our extremely limited h sweats song of the brain itself who knows, maybe it is brains;)
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You can have partial rhymes.
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On the shore, men rant and rave
as she swims above the waves.
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Tips to carve out such beautiful lines please? 🙊
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Impracticably limit yourself in every other pursuit:) Thank you!
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Excellent insouciance well versed and worded! I’m definitely going to follow this. Thanks for letting me know you were out there by following my blog. Much appreciated. Wonderful 2-way street!
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Ink stains truly are the worst to get out…
And now to go take a listen to School House Rock again and recite the poem to its beat!
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Good to hold onto old stuff. Never know when it can be enhanced/and/or used later.
Art
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Greetings–
You recently joined me at annieasksyou. Pleased by that support and intrigued by your blog name, I am now paying you a visit–and I’m delighted that I’ve done so. Your creativity and irony are super; I am also now your latest follower.
As you have a bit of a fixation with octopuses (and yes, that’s the plural), which I share, I invite you to visit my post “Can I Get My Arms Around This Animal?” at your leisure. I consider myself a prose writer, though I do try other stuff. But when I see where your mind takes you, I’m tempted to open mine a bit more.
Cheers,
Annie
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Thanks so much for visiting Annie, all the best!
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